Help me write a summer anthem!
I’ve written a couple of verses and a catchy chorus for a great summer song called Sunshine Beauty, and I want your help to finish it.
Sunshine Beauty (so far)
The story
The story so far goes something like this: Boy is waiting in the city in the pouring rain to meet girl. Girl rounds the corner looking flustered and boy realises that girl is absolutely the most beautiful and amazing person he has ever seen.
That’s the first two verses. Then there’s a catchy chorus (”And then it hits me…”). After that we need a third verse that takes the song in an interesting new direction, maybe even putting a new spin on the chorus lyric. Maybe it’s in the past or the future. Maybe there’s another sunshine association. Maybe they are already lovers. Maybe not. Who knows?!
What happens next?
Leave a comment with your ideas, or write me something great in 140 characters on Twitter, or if you don’t want the world to know it’s you why not email it to me?
The lyrics so far
[Verse 1]
Pouring cold, city sounds
Busy people waving brollies around
And I’m just kicking my heels trying not to get too wet
Catch a glimpse, then it’s gone
Between the vacant zombies with their headphones on
And you’re looking round cos you haven’t seen me yet
[Verse 2]
Traffic comes, traffic goes
Traffic fumes make you crinkle your nose
And you’re just holding your ground trying to save a nightmare day
Your hair’s blown in your face
You’re kinda clumsy with an effortless grace
And I know I’m going to grin like a fool when you look my way
[Chorus]
And then it hits me
You’re the woman I need
You’re a sunshine beauty
And you light up the street
I love you baby
And try as I might
I can’t get your sunshine
Out of my mind
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7 Comments, Comment or Ping
Dean Whitbread
Winter’s gone, summer’s here,
Sunbaked skin and ice cold beer
And I’m lying on the grass, haven’t seen a cloud all day
Seems so right to stay up all night
And take a risk, you know I just might
Really start to believe it when you say you’ll stay
Jan 6th, 2009
Mike R
This is the best I can do in a short space of time:
Looking hot, blowing cold
Setting sun as the day gets old
And then the sun comes out trying to slow us down
The day goes too fast
We’re having fun that we know won’t last
And I forget about tomorrow when you look at me now
Jan 6th, 2009
Matt Brodeur
Okay, I just had to answer this challenge. Here’s what I’ve got so far for a first draft:
Empty cup, coffee grounds
Empty cafe with no one else around
Waitress getting antsy that no one is buying
Next time I swear I’ll say
Something clever and not just walk away
And I’m just trying to let no one see me crying
Jan 7th, 2009
Charlie Cheney
Your lift your arm as a taxi splashes
Your hand nearly knocks off your glasses
Your exasperated grin makes me laugh like I haven’t in ages
You see my laughter and blush
And that’s invitation enough
How could I refuse to help a fair maiden?
Jan 7th, 2009
Matt Brodeur
Take 2:
A bus goes by and you catch my eye
I try to look casual and adjust my tie
I’m feeling like a little boy with a schoolyard crush on the redheaded girl
You take a step toward me and start to smile
I haven’t felt this way in quite a while
. . . feel like I’m going to hurl (no, that’s not it)
. . . give it a whirl
I don’t know. I’m drawing a blank now. Painted myself into a corner with girl.
Jan 7th, 2009
Ben Walker
Brilliant. How great to wake up to such thoughtful suggestions. I’ll try them out tonight and see what sticks. Watch this space… ;o)
Jan 7th, 2009
Ben Walker
Having played around with them a bit, I’ve settled on this as a working verse. It’s my favourite lines from all your suggestions worked into a coherent structure. I’ll video it and post an update soon. Thanks again for all your help!;o):
Winter’s gone, summer’s here,
Baking heat and ice cold beer
And I’m like a little boy with a schoolyard crush on the redhead girl
Looking hot, blowing cold
Make me feel like I’m ten years old
Now everything that’s not you is a blur
Jan 7th, 2009
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